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Question
You are Sunidhi Prakash, the Vice Captain of Brilliant Vidyalaya, Barra, Kanpur. You have recently noticed several posters around your school premises conveying a hazardous message:
| Lose weight in just a month! “A WONDER DIET comes to your rescue… A privilege available for only a few!” |
Write a letter to the Editor of The DWA, in not more than 120 words, drawing attention towards harm caused by such advertising. Propose the implementation of “Wholesome Lunch Month’ in schools as an idea to address such practices, mention the advantages and share suggestions to foster healthy eating routines and develop positive body image among youngsters.
Solution
Brilliant Vidyalaya,
Barra,
Kanpur.
25th April, 2021
The Editor,
The DWA,
Kanpur.
Subject: Need for Promoting Healthy Eating Routines
Dear Sir,
I am writing this letter to draw your attention to the increase in adverts promoting hazardous diets promising quick weight loss. I have been noticing several such ads promising fast weight loss around my school. They not only create the false impression that thin is beautiful but also trigger eating disorders among young people. I know many students in my school who have fallen prey to such dangerous diets. They despise their body and show desperation to lose weight. Unfortunately, by adopting such inadequate diets, they are depriving their body of essential nutrients. This affects their health and subjects them to various ailments.
I would like to propose the idea of implementing "Wholesome Lunch Month" for all school students to counter the implications of such misleading advertisements. I feel that schools should celebrate Wholesome Lunch Months to create awareness among students about including all essential nutrients in their diet. If your newspaper can promote such campaigns, more and more schools will come forward to implement them in their campus. Such programs will make children aware of the dangers of adopting these crash diets and encourage them to start eating healthy again.
Thank you for your consideration.
Yours truly,
Sunidhi Prakash,
Vice Captain of Brilliant Vidyalaya,
Barra, Kanpur.
Notes
Marking Scheme
FORMAT – 1 mark
NOTE - full credit if all aspects are included. Partial credit (½ mark) if one-two aspects are missing. No credit if more than two aspects are missing.
Note for given descriptors - Dedicated marks at a level are to be awarded only if ALL descriptors match. If one or more descriptors do not match, the marks are awarded at a level lower.
CONTENT - 2 marks
- 2 marks
- All points included
- Well-developed with sustained clarity
- 1½ marks
- Almost all points incorporated
- Reasonably well-developed
- 1 mark
- Some points incorporated
- Fair attempt at developing ideas with some impact on clarity of response
- ½ mark
- Most of the points of the given task not incorporated
- Limited awareness of task development
ORGANISATION OF IDEAS - 1 mark
1 mark - Consistent with a frequent display of the listed parameters.
- Highly effective style capable of conveying the ideas convincingly with appropriate layout of a formal letter viz. addresses, salutation, subscription, and ending
- Carefully structured content with organised paragraphing presented cohesively.
- Highly effective register (formal tone, tense, and vocabulary), relevant and appropriate sentences for conveying the ideas precisely and effectively.
½ mark - Limited display of listed parameters.
- Inconsistent style, expression sometimes awkward, layout barely accurate.
- Poor sequencing of ideas; often sporadically clear and related to the given topic in an attempt to maintain a general overall cohesion. Displays disjointed portions, exhibiting a lack of coherence of ideas.
- Range of vocabulary is limited but manages to convey, largely, the overall meaning and the purpose of the writing. A large portion of vocabulary copied from question.
ACCURACY - 1 mark
1 mark
- Spelling, punctuation and grammar consistently/largely accurate, with occasional minor errors, that do not impede communication.
½ mark
- Spelling, punctuation and grammar display some errors spread across, causing minor impediments to the message communicated.
No credit
- Frequent errors in spelling, punctuation and grammar, impeding communication.
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